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Zombie

Posted on September 19, 2012September 21, 2012 by Andrew

He could smell it; the unmistakable scent of living human flesh and he sensed an opportunity to feast on something warm, rich and satisfying.

He lumbered down a road that was somehow vaguely familiar, the street lights in the darkness casting eerie shadows but he did not notice – he was unaware of the environment.

A movement in a room, the hurried extinguishing of a light inside, he became aware that the smell emanated from within so he followed his instinct to the house; glass doors were no obstacle and he easily found his way inside.

The smell was stronger now and he followed it up the stairs; somehow he knew where he needed to go.

A scream, “No Daddy!”, then eerie silence before the satiation.

 

Lillie McFerrin

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34 thoughts on “Zombie”

  1. dekeboo says:
    September 20, 2012 at 3:53 am

    That’s very creepy and I felt like i was in his shadow. Great post.

    1. Andrew says:
      September 20, 2012 at 6:49 am

      Thank you!

  2. lisashambrook says:
    September 20, 2012 at 11:30 am

    Pretty horrific, and a final sentence to make you shiver!

    1. Andrew says:
      September 20, 2012 at 11:54 am

      I doubt he could feel that horror, which is horrific in itself. Thanks for the comment Lisa!

  3. McGuffyAnn says:
    September 20, 2012 at 2:27 pm

    Definitely horrific, on several levels.

    1. Andrew says:
      September 20, 2012 at 2:46 pm

      This is my first horror piece. I’m glad you liked it. Thanks for the comment.

  4. Sarah Mac says:
    September 21, 2012 at 1:20 am

    In each sentence there is a clue to that twist at the end but it’s still a shocker when it comes. Ive never attepmted horror either, this is a great first!

    1. Andrew says:
      September 21, 2012 at 6:06 am

      Thank you Sarah.

  5. Rosalind Smith-Nazilli says:
    September 21, 2012 at 7:21 am

    Most definitely the way to do it… Excellent piece and really well written.

    ps: Did you know your link goes to your old blog? xx

    1. Andrew says:
      September 21, 2012 at 8:25 am

      Thanks for the lovely comments Rosalind.

      Which link is it that’s wrong? I can’t find it!

  6. LE Jamez (@LEJamez) says:
    September 22, 2012 at 1:26 pm

    hard to believe this is your first horror, you’ve captured the atmosphere really well, great job.

    1. Andrew says:
      September 22, 2012 at 2:23 pm

      That’s very kind. Thanks for the comment LE!

  7. injaynesworld says:
    September 22, 2012 at 2:14 pm

    Yikes! I’m glad I didn’t read this before bedtime. This is the stuff of nightmares. Good job, Andrew.

    1. Andrew says:
      September 22, 2012 at 2:22 pm

      Thanks so much Jayne. It was fun to get into his head for a moment!

  8. Angela Goff (@Angela_Goff) says:
    September 22, 2012 at 7:03 pm

    WOAH. Was not expecting that last sentence! Very creepy, very neatly crafted.

    1. Andrew says:
      September 23, 2012 at 9:59 am

      Haha, I love your response Angela! Thanks for reading!

  9. Lillie McFerrin says:
    September 22, 2012 at 7:11 pm

    This is a perfect example of packing the most punch with the least amount of words. A vivid, creepy story. Love it!!

    1. Andrew says:
      September 23, 2012 at 9:59 am

      Thanks Lillie!

  10. lasalk says:
    September 23, 2012 at 5:34 pm

    There’s nothing like a well-written horror story with a great twist.

    1. Andrew says:
      September 23, 2012 at 7:00 pm

      It’s the twist that makes it worthwhile I think. Thanks for the comment.

  11. Melanie Cole says:
    September 23, 2012 at 9:22 pm

    Creepy! Loved seeing it from his point of view, very good!

    1. Andrew says:
      September 23, 2012 at 11:50 pm

      Thank you Melanie, and thanks for taking the time to read my work.

  12. Britton Minor says:
    September 24, 2012 at 9:25 pm

    Creepy…very very creepy – also unexpected and, oddly, delicious. I’m not sure I liked what this brought out in me. 🙂

    1. Andrew says:
      September 25, 2012 at 6:29 am

      Relish the dark side!

  13. TheOthers1 says:
    September 25, 2012 at 8:22 am

    I know everyone else has said it, but I’ll say it again. Creepy. That last line freaked me out a bit. Nicely done.

    1. Andrew says:
      September 25, 2012 at 8:31 am

      Thank you CC. I’ll admit that this prompt was a bit of a stretch for me too. That’s how we grow though.

  14. Wayne Assiratti says:
    September 25, 2012 at 1:38 pm

    Oh. No. That made my skin crawl. Brilliant writing!

    1. Andrew says:
      September 25, 2012 at 1:47 pm

      Thanks Wayne. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

  15. JazzBumpa says:
    September 25, 2012 at 2:57 pm

    Ick. Gruesome. Good job, though.

    JzB

    1. Andrew says:
      September 25, 2012 at 3:34 pm

      Thanks. Gruesome and Ick were what I was hoping for.

  16. Michelle Wallace says:
    September 26, 2012 at 7:23 am

    This is pure horror! The final line is brilliant and delivers a devastating blow…

    1. Andrew says:
      September 26, 2012 at 7:31 pm

      Thank you for the kind words Michelle.

  17. Denis Wright (@deniswright) says:
    September 27, 2012 at 5:34 am

    It’s a good story, from the ‘inside’, and well crafted. Good fun!

    1. Andrew says:
      September 27, 2012 at 6:46 am

      Thank you Denis. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

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