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Posted on October 29, 2012 by Andrew

He could feel it; the poison running through his veins with a burning ferocity that was consuming him from within. How ironic he thought, that the bottle was marked “Love Potion No. 4”.

He’d had no luck wooing the girl he’d been dreaming about for years, and so he had made his way to the French Quarter where in a dingy backstreet store he had explained his plight to perhaps the oldest woman he’d ever seen, and left a short time later with the small blue-grey bottle.

Trembling with excitement at the prospect of finally having his love he had donned his best outfit just in case she knocked on his door immediately afterwards, and settling down in his favorite chair he had consumed the elixir in one swallow.

The draught did exactly what the old woman had said it would do – it united him with his love, but how was he to know that her car had gone into the river just two hours earlier?

 

Lillie McFerrin

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20 thoughts on “Potions”

  1. Green Speck says:
    October 29, 2012 at 11:09 am

    What a lovely twist at the end … awesome !!!

    1. Andrew says:
      October 29, 2012 at 11:48 am

      Thank you!

  2. K R Smith says:
    October 29, 2012 at 5:09 pm

    Excellent ending!

    1. Andrew says:
      October 29, 2012 at 5:16 pm

      Much appreciated. Thanks for visiting.

  3. Britton Minor says:
    October 29, 2012 at 5:54 pm

    Love sucks! But great job…

    1. Andrew says:
      October 29, 2012 at 6:11 pm

      ‘Til death us do part….

  4. Mark K says:
    October 31, 2012 at 9:45 am

    Brilliant and superbly executed. Very nice twist. Thank you once again for stopping by the Hearth. I hope your first experience there won’t discourage you from future visits. I look forward to seeing you there again sometime 🙂

    1. Andrew says:
      October 31, 2012 at 12:53 pm

      I’ll definitely be back there Mark. Thanks for the kind comments.

  5. TheOthers1 says:
    October 31, 2012 at 10:04 am

    Oh! Well done with that ending. I’m suitable impressed with this story.

    1. Andrew says:
      October 31, 2012 at 12:58 pm

      Thank you CC, I appreciate you checking out my piece.

  6. jeanelain says:
    October 31, 2012 at 11:25 am

    Great twist! Absolutely loved this one!

    1. Andrew says:
      October 31, 2012 at 12:59 pm

      Thank you Jean, and thanks for stopping by!

  7. Rossandra says:
    October 31, 2012 at 12:52 pm

    Well done! A pleasure to read.

    1. Andrew says:
      October 31, 2012 at 1:00 pm

      Thanks so much Rossandra 🙂

  8. JazzBumpa says:
    October 31, 2012 at 4:31 pm

    Timing is everything. (and I almost got here too late.)

    Evil twist – very dark.

    Good job!
    JzB

    1. Andrew says:
      October 31, 2012 at 5:04 pm

      Yes, timing IS everything! Good to see you here JzB!

  9. Laura McHale Holland says:
    October 31, 2012 at 7:58 pm

    I really enjoyed this story, Andrew. Like so many others who have commented, I think the twist at the end is superb. It was unexpected, yet fitting.

    1. Andrew says:
      October 31, 2012 at 8:15 pm

      Thank you Laura. I very much appreciate your comments.

  10. lisashambrook says:
    November 1, 2012 at 7:21 am

    Yes, my jaw dropped at the ending! Nooo… Poor guy, but great writing Andrew!

    1. Andrew says:
      November 1, 2012 at 8:20 am

      At least he was finally united with his love. Thanks for visiting Lisa.

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