It hadn’t always been this way; there had been a time when his eyes hadn’t wandered from his wife to the pretty girls at the bar, but thinking back he really couldn’t remember when.
He’d never strayed – never taken the road that could not be undone, but this time for some reason it was different; it was as though he was drawn as a moth is to a flame, and he felt powerless to resist.
Perhaps it was because he was alone in a late night bar in the big city, or perhaps it was that he’d had just a little too much too drink – the result was the same, tonight was the time for something new; something different.
He steeled himself, checked himself up and down and made his move; the room vanishing around him as he struck up a conversation.
In that moment he realized that he would never want a woman again.
oh my he’s taken a real detour – I like your twisted tale!
Thank you Sarah. I’m glad you appreciate the sting in my tale.
I’m really enjoying your fiction pieces-especially since I can never anticipate your hairpin turns.
Surprise is so wonderful, don’t you think? Thanks for visiting Britt.
Damn! You knocked this one out of the park, my friend. 🙂
Thank you Jayne. I’m looking forward to reading your take on this prompt 🙂
Wow! Completely unexpected ending. Nice job 😀
Thank you Lillie – I appreciate you visiting!
wow huge twist at the end- well done 🙂
Thank you Jenny. The twist is fun, isn’t it!
Nicely done with a great build-up to that punch. Great writing skill, sir!
Thank you Mark. I appreciate your kind words.
Wow. That’s an epiphany.
Didn’t see it coming.
Well done.
JzB
I’m glad you enjoyed it JzB – I think it was a shock for him too.
Well I wasn’t expecting that! Great twist.
Thanks Sarah. I’m glad you stopped by.
Brilliant Andrew. Really compact and efficient writing. Short, bittersweet and a kick at the end.
Cheers,
W.
Thanks Wayne. It’s amazing what can be communicated in five sentences. I really like this concept. Thanks for visiting!
Wow. Your sentences really grabbed me. And, that ending. Love it!
Thank you Shari. That’s very kind of you.
A real turning point in his life. Very nicely done, Andrew.
Hi Sandra. Yes, a definite turning point. Thank you for visiting.
Well crafted selection of 5, Andrew. I love the slam at the end! A defining moment!
Thank you Michelle. You’re very kind.
Not where I thought it was going! lol
Yes, the piece took a detour too!
” . . .the room vanishing around him as he struck up a conversation,” total commitment to straying and then, bam! he’s done. Niiice!
Thanks for stopping by!
That last line was a game changer. My eyebrows shot to my hairline there. There’s plenty else I could say (about his deciding to cheat and whom he’ll be cheating with), but I’ll settle on saying great job.
I suspect his own eyebrows shot to his hairline as he made his discovery too! Thanks for the encouragement.